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考场雅思8.5分作文还原

The table compares the energy production by different fuel sources in the UK.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Energy production by different fuel types in UK (1 units = a million tons of energy)

文章采用了经典的四段式结构，清晰明了：

1. 开头段：改写题目

2. 主体段1：趋势上升的一段- natural gas 和oil的数据较大，且趋势相似，但是natural gas的上升幅度较为明显，oil和 hydropower的增幅较小，在描述趋势过程中，注意关键数据点（起点、峰值、谷值、终点）以及相应的时间。

3. 主体段2：趋势有波动的一段- coal 和nuclear power的趋势都是先增后降

4. 概述段： 总结极值

The table illustrates the changes in the total amount of energy produced by five different types of fuel in the UK in the year 1990, 1996, and 2000. 

As is manifested in the chart, natural gas and oil were the major contributors in energy production and energy produced from them showed an increasing trend in the given period. Specifically, there was a noticeable growth in the amount of energy produced by natural gas, rising from 76 units all the way to 96 units within two decades. Similarly, starting from 77 units in 1990, the total amount of energy generated by oil experienced smaller rise compared with natural gas, reaching to 79 units in 2000. Meanwhile, this trend was mirrored in the amount of energy produced by hyropower, despite its much smaller contribution, which ended at 0.6 in 2000, doubling the original figure in 1990. 

By harnessing coal, a total of 35 units of energy were produced in 1990. After a growth of 15 units was recorded in the next decade, its figure fell back to the original level in 2000. As for nuclear power, an upward tendency was found in the first 10-year period, peaking at 30 units, before its number declined by 5 units. 

Overall, it is apparent that natural gas and oil were dominant sources for energy production, and their contribution kept enlarging, while hyropower played a minor role in this regard.

Some people think joining programs that provide international visits is necessary for every teenage student in school. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

文章采用了经典的四段式结构，清晰明了。

1. 引言段

1）引入话题： 首句以宏观背景（全球化）切入，引出“国际交流项目”这一主题。

2）表明立场： 明确给出自己的观点——“...is a valuable experience for every teenager”（对每个青少年都是宝贵的经历），直接回答了题目问题，即优点大于缺点。

2. 主体段1（优点论证）

主题句： 首句“Enthusiasts are rightly justified...”明确本段将阐述优点。

1）分论点1并展开论证： 培养跨文化沟通能力与全球视野...

2) 分论点2并展开论证： 培养独立性。

3. 主体段2（缺点承认与反驳）

这是本文精彩的部分，采用了“承认-反驳”的高阶论证手法。

缺点1：费用昂贵，加重家庭负担。

反驳/解决方案： 政府可以提供财政援助。

缺点2：青少年可能感到不适，影响心理健康。

反驳/解决方案： 学校可提供心理咨询，且学生之间可以互相支持。

效果： 这种写法不仅展示了思维的辩证性（考虑了双方观点），还极大地强化了自己的立场——即使有缺点，这些缺点也是可以克服的，从而有力地证明了“优点大于缺点”。

4. 结论段-重申立场

In today’s globalized world, programs offering adolescents the opportunity to have international exchanges are gaining ever-increasing popularity. While some critics claim that international visits bring unfavorable influences to young minds, I would argue that enrolling in these programs is a valuable experience for every teenager. 

Enthusiasts are rightly justified in highlighting numerous benefits they offer. One key advantage is that teenagers gain exposure to intercultural communication. To be more specific, living and studying in a foreign country means young people could mingle and integrate with peers from diverse cultural backgrounds, experience new teaching methods, and try different cuisines. This gives them a deeper insight into cultural uniqueness and help them develop a global perspective necessary in the interconnected world. Another benefit worth noticing is that such experience cultivates independence. When left to their own devices, youngsters must adapt and resolve issues through their own efforts, enhancing their problem-solving skills, building up confidence, and accumulating life experience. In addition, life skills, such as cooking and cleaning are often improved when they live overseas by themselves, better preparing them for adulthood.

However, concerns raised by opponents also deserve due attention. Admittedly, international programs are generally considered to be expensive, so less privileged families will be financially overburdened, lowering the living standard of parents and bringing a sense of inadequacy and inferiority to the young. Yet, government can give financial assistance to disadvantaged teenagers, promoting educational equality. Moreover, it is not uncommon for the young to feel overwhelmed. The sense of loneliness and constant anxiety while they are away from home, compounded by cultural shock, could be detrimental to their mental well-being. Although risks of mental distress should not be underestimated, psychological consultation can be arranged to alleviate this issue. Besides, shared experience also encourages students to mutually support each other, building up a supportive community.  

In conclusion, I reiterate my earlier statement that participation in international exchange programs is beneficial, as it promotes cultural awareness and nurtures autonomy. Nevertheless, financial and mental support are essential to minimize potential hazards.