雅思写作的备考周期一比较长,只要坚持备考就一定会取得不错的备考效果,今天成都新航道的小编为考生整理了雅思写作:我们是越来越独立还是更相互依赖?的参考文本,希望对大家有所帮助!
雅思写作题目:
Some people think individuals are more and more dependent on each other. Others believe we are more and more independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
解析:
11 月 5 日的雅思大作文是一道旧题,是 2013 年 8 月 24 日的原题重现,就本题而言,当今社会,我们是更互相依赖了,还是更独立了?好像双方都有很多道理。比如,有人说,我们现在更加独立了,因特网的出现,我们可以在家购物,在家上班,在家读书;经济水平和社会条件的改善,老年人可住老年公寓,不再依靠其子女的赡养了;女性可以工作,当然也不再依靠其丈夫了。总之,我们对外界的依赖似乎越来越少。然而,转换角度,我们会发现,由于社会分工越来越精细,我们每个人都只是其中的一环,因此,实际上,我们的社会依赖程度甚至高于以往。比如,华尔街的金融分析师们的电脑出了问题,必须依靠电脑专家来解决;好莱坞的大导演们家里水管坏了,必须依靠管道工来解决,等等。从情感上看,我们相互依赖程度也可能更高:正是由于在身体上我们相互依赖程度减少,我们的情感依赖可能更高了,即使是那些住老年公寓的老年人,他们对儿女的情感依赖完全可能高于以往住在一起的时候。那么,我觉得结论就是:表面上看(physically),我们好像比以前独立了;但情感上(emotionally) 或社会关系上(socially),我们相互依赖的程度也许更高了。
高分范文及笔记:
Today, we can apparently accomplish a lot of things without the help of others, which leads to the popular belief that we are becoming more and more independent. However, while we enjoy this independence in some ways, we are actually becoming more dependent on each other in others.
(1)本段重述题目,同时提出作者观点。
(2)apparently 表面上地;似乎,好像
(3)accomplish 成功地做 ...... (=complete;do successfully)
(4)while 引导的句型很常见,相当于 though。
Independence means more freedom and less restrictions. Following this definition, we can easily find we have become much more independent than ever before. For instance, thanks to the Internet, we can now sit at home and send letters to our friends without bothering to go to the post office. We can also use our smart phones as a tool for shopping and reading so that we are freed from driving to the supermarket or carrying heavy books with us. We have more independence in families, too. As people earn more money and enjoy better medical care, they no longer have to reply on their children to take care of them when they grow old, instead, they can spend their late years in the nursing home for the old. And, with women gaining more and more equality in the workplace, they have also gained the financial independence.
(1) 本段讨论“我们现在好像越来越独立”这个论点。从“独立”的定义出发,然后分别举因特网时代写信、购物、阅读的自由,家庭里年老的父母不再依靠孩子,经济上妻子不再依靠丈夫,从这几个方面论述我们现在似乎越来越独立。
(2)注意观察本段一些句子的开头。Following this definition,
...; thanks to the Internet, ...; As people earn more money...; with women gaining more and more equality...,这些丰富多样的句子开头,表明的是具有灵活驾驭句子结构的能力。很多同学的句子永远都是主语 + 谓语 + 宾语的结构,缺少变化,从而影响得分。本段提供了一个很好的模仿范例。
(3)restriction 限制 (= limitation)
(4)thanks to... 由于,因为(=because of; owing to...)
(5)bother to do... 麻烦做 ......
(6)gain 获得
That said, I would argue that the independence we enjoy today comes at huge costs. As the labor division becomes more intensified, it is now very common that an individual becomes a moron when he has one step outside his own profession. As a consequence, he becomes more dependent on others in life. A Wall Street financial analyst may be extremely skillful in his field and earn tons of money to render his life very independent, yet without a plumber, his life may turn into a mess when a pipe is blocked in his kitchen. Then when he grows old and lives in the nursing home far away from his children, his loneliness will make him more dependent emotionally on them and this dependence really hurts.
(1)本段讨论当代生活如何让我们越来越依赖别人,从社会分工的后果及情感依赖两个角度来论述。
(2)that said, ... 话虽如此(表达一个转折)(3)at huge costs 以巨大成本(4)labor division 劳动分工
(5)as a consequence 结果(=consequently; as a result)
(6)block 堵塞
It is, therefore, true that the development of science and technology does bring us more physical independence, but socially and emotionally, we may become more dependent on each other.
本段为总结段,提炼前文的讨论。